This contest is quick and easy. Just leave a comment on the below snippet and let me know what you think. Please leave your name and email address. Prizes are the first two books in pdf format of my Hell's Gate Series.
There was a knock on the door
echoing through my apartment. My eyes glanced at the DVD
player and I sighed debating if I wanted to press play or answer the door.
Guess which one I chose? Yes, I opened the door and there was Dante in tight
black jeans and a red T-shit. He took my breath away as his dark hair was swept
up in a ponytail and his dark eyes sparkled.
He looked up at me and held my gaze and produced a single purple rose.
It was the most thoughtful thing. I took it and nicked my thumb so that a
bubble of blood came up and before I could clean it Dante snatched it up and
sucked on it. The look on his face was pure ecstasy. He looked up at me,
smiled, and ran his tongue over the flesh and yeah it was weird, but it was
also the sexiest thing I ever had done to me.
Without
another word, he pulled me to him and locked me in a deep throat kiss. Finally
he pulled away leaving me breathless. “Wow. What prompted that?”
He
came in, locked the door behind him, and led me to the couch. His hands slid
over my shirt searching for a way to get under it. I nearly fell into his
embrace, but decided that the evil flying monkeys were gnawing at my conscious.
Something about this was all wrong. “Dante. This is great and all, but what the
hell did you want to tell me. I get the feeling that your mother is not dying.
So fess up.”
He
laughed richly reminded me of dark chocolate rubbing over silk, sweet and soft,
but it would still go to my thighs. “You’re very perceptive or I’m losing my
touch.”
“Let’s
go with I’m perceptive. Now what gives? You run off on me, break my heart and
then come crawling back lying about a dying mother. So what’s up?”
“Okay,
so you got me. I lied about my mother, but there’s something that I wanted to
tell you. Show you.”
I
leaned in close and kissed him lightly and he kissed me harder. I fell over onto
him and ran my tongue across his lips. As I did, I felt something sharp. I
pulled away quickly and came back tasting blood. Dante just looked at me and
smiled seductively.
“That
was what I wanted to talk to you about. You see. I’m a vampire. I fell for you
hard and I wanted to be sure about you. And I think I am.”
I
stared at him and laughter bubbled up. We were certainly not in Kansas anymore. “So
you’re a vampire.”
Anger
crossed Dante’s face. “Madison
I’m serious. More than you know. I hoped that it wouldn’t come down to this,
but—” He pulled back his lips into a snarl and I saw his fangs growing and he
struck, biting into my neck. The pain was so abrupt that it hit me quickly and
took me a moment to react and then the pleasure of his mouth on my neck. Okay,
this guy was for real. No normal human being could make teeth grow like that
and then move so quickly. Hmmm..the twister had picked up my house and landed
me on top of the wicked witch herself. Finally, I came to my senses and started
beating him on the chest to get him off of me. Not that I wanted him to stop,
but a girl has to talk.
Dante
moved back and I saw the smear on his lips and on his teeth as he preened the
vestiges with his tongue. “Okay, I believe you. So what? You going to make me
into a vampire or what?”
He
just looked at me as if I had shot him. “You know, Madison. I’m sorry. I shouldn’t have come
here. I thought. I don’t know what I thought.” He looked as if he had come to
some horrid realization. He bleached out like stone and I was a statue that he
didn’t see. He moved toward the door and I looked at him puzzled and moved in
front of him before he could get to the door.
“Whoa,
you come over here, tell me you’re a vampire, and now you’re just leaving. What
the hell?”
He
signed and stared me straight in the eyes. “Honestly, you’re just not my type.”
He
pushed me out of the way and in an instant he was gone evaporating into mist. I
was left open mouthed, gaping at where he had gone. I turned on my heel and
went back to the freezer, still in disbelief. I pulled out my last pint of ice
cream and took out a spoon. I was more in shock as I opened up the pint and
picked up the phone. But I hung it back up and knew that Chris would never
believe me. Damn, it was just my luck.
Boyfriends
sucked. Literally, it seemed.
I
flicked the DVD on and even before
the Technicolor cornfields came on, I decided to switch out the disc and put in
a vampire movie that I had bought on a whim. Yeah, it was definitely time to
find a new movie. No more trips over the rainbow for me.
From now on, I was sticking with my
girlfriends.
Hope you have enjoyed this. It's a short I'm thinking about expanding.
Happy Holidays
16 comments:
You have laid the ground work for a full novel here. This is definitely a teaser. Good luck with expanding it. I'll be interested to see how it turns out.
Loray
sweetpea122 at rocketmail dot com
Nice teaser. I want to know why he decided she wasn't his type, did he not want to have to turn her into a vampire? I would love to read me.
Hope you have a wonderful Christmas & new year.
June M.
manning_j2004 at yahoo dot com
Sounds intriguing and now I'm feeling a little sad because there isn't any more (yet ). Looking forward to seeing what comes up with this.
kagashi at fmtc dot net
I loved it! If you made this into a full length novel, I would definitely read it! Thanks for the tease, and for the giveaway! And thanks for participating in this very fun blog hop:)
jwitt33 at live dot com
I liked the teaser. Wish there was a little more of it though. Happy hoplidays!
Great teaser. Would love to read this as a full novel.
Happy holidays
Lisa
Wolphcall(at)bellsouth(dot)net
Sounds yummy, would love to read more!
-Amber
goodblinknpark@yahoo.com
What he didn't like her blood type? First he's sure about her and then he leaves after dropping that bombshell. I would love to know what she does next.
Thanks for the giveaway!
beckerjo at verizon dot net
Good hook, could really expand on this.
Definitely think you should expand!! Wow! And I cannot wait to read your other books! This hop has helped me find so many amazing authors. Pleased to meet you :0)
Merry Christmas <3
bakinstuff@yahoo.com
stacey siferd
Its quite a teaser! So intriguing i cant wait for more! Thanks for sharing it with us! Cant wait to read it! Its definitely going to be a great book! Thank you! Happy holidays!
shadowluvs2read(at)gmail(dot)com
You really caught my attention, sounds really good! Happy Holidays to you ;)
Eva
evitap67(at)gmail(dot)com
Sounds goof to me, I was ready to read more!
hhollyhal at gmail dot com
I liked it a lot. Can't wait to read more when you make it a book.
Merry Christmas.
luvfuzzzeeefaces at yahoo dot com
I like your writing. Hoping to win your prize!
mcv111@hotmail.com
Thanks to everyone who participated and left a comment. From all the wonderful feedback that I received, I am definitely going to pursue the short I posted into a full novel. Of course have to add it to the list of things to do.
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